Sunday, June 6, 2010

FINALLY IM IN LOVE...

Wait Wait..let me clarify before u guys come to conclusions from the title and start asking questions..
its just another fictional writing, but this time genre/theme is LOVE.

LOVE -- its almost next great thing to god in this world...isnt it friends?? so how come i do not have anything about it in my blog..here it goes...

It was one fine evening in the month of november and weather outside was cool and awesome. Trees were moving behind very fast like they want to catch up with speed of clouds in the sky. Looks like everything from the outside of the window was in hurry but someone inside wants the time to stop at that moment.

Train is going at 120 kms speed since its late by an hour or so. Bogie filled up with people busy in their own way, some still reading morning news paper, some got film/news magazines, laptops, ipods..some were enjoying the beautiful view outside and some dumb people even sleeping.

He is feeling so strange at that moment, never gone through this kind of situation before. He feels so complete that day. All started some hours back when he was sitting idle and listening to music, train came to halt at some station. A old woman came to his berth and searching for seat numbers, after confirming that its the right place, she asked him to help getting some luggage inside. He immediately agreed and went out astonished to see a beautiful girl at the platform trying to lift some boxes. He helped her with carrying entire luggage inside and she did not noticed him at all while doing all this.

Train started again and slowly picking up speed. Now that old woman and her grand daughter settled in their seats, girl saw him and thanked him for the help.
He was already looking intensely into her eyes with awe of her beauty. shes simple yet beautiful, composed and attractive. She is also kind of impressed with his looks and help he had done. After finishing off exchanging looks, both of them wanted to talk to each other but could not do so. Anyways Eyes after all were the windows to the soul they speak lot.

Somehow another middle-aged man in the same cabin got bored with his magazine and started some topic which in turn lead to discussion and then these both got first chance of talking to each other. Starting with participation in the discussion, they slowly moved onto their introductions and all. They even exchanged their numbers since they both work in same industry. They almost liked everything about each other but its too early for both of them to think serious about this relation in such a short span of time. He want to make sure that she is the best for him and she feels the same.

Meanwhile train reached its final destination. All the passengers got down and busy walking towards exit, also the boy and girl but deep inside they do not want to leave the place. He again helped them with luggage and they took an auto leaving him in sorrow and despair. He reached home disheartened and disappointed over losing a nice girl in his life.



After some time, his mobile beeped - " Hii just reached home, wat abt u? "





- shri

Every person is a fool in somebody's opinion.

9 comments:

  1. i think its not a fiction..

    waiting for next.

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  2. ledu raviii...purely fictious...

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  3. NARRATION IS LIKE THAT..VERY VERY REALIASTIC.
    HOPE U CAN POST THE NEXT PART SOON.

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  4. babu passenger aa ?? porter aa ?? lol
    but that was nice.

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  5. good narration but seems like some movie story!
    will wait for the next part and then confirm...

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  6. thnx for the comments guyss...
    Sadly , there was no next part..its just a short story and ends here..
    but will comeup with something else next time..so keep looking..

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  7. A good start and went on interesting but somehow ending was missing..try for patch for this..

    Satish..Yerra

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  8. sounds like a familiar story on Indian trains - anyway really sweet story. keep writing :) - A

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